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Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #individuals #want
Without a doubt, advertising is pervasive in modern society. What’s worse,
people
 may receive many
advertisements
 and be brainwashed unconsciously. I agree that our government should take some initiatives to prevent citizens from being extremely exposed to various
advertisements
. Especially for some underage
people
, there is a lot of improper information mentioned in some
advertisements
 that will mislead them.
Moreover
, youngsters might be instilled into some values shaped by the media. Most enterprises only care about their own profits rather than the mental development of children. If our government sits watching and does nothing, more and more social problems may emerge and aggregate into a negative social atmosphere. By that time, it will be too late to make any changes. Regulating the content of
advertisements
 and limiting where ads can be placed are both top priorities. For commercial reasons, enterprises may roll out merchandise as much as possible to arouse the desire of consumers.
However
, if they go too far, they will in turn standardize our tastes through airing or posting ads continuously. Gradually,
people
 have been under pressure to keep up with their peers and not dare to be unique among
people
. There’s no room for
people
 to stand against trends anymore. What’s more, creativity and novelty will be stifled and no longer seen in the world. Capitalists will be the winner and predominant in the market without
people
 reversing
this
 condition. To stand against that, consumers should be able to think for themselves and not be subjected to capitalism.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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