Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, young generations are obviously relying on laptops, youtube and mobile phones a lot. There may be differences with the early 1980s and late 1990s who are from that age levels loved to play by person'
games
and activity than mobile
games
and internet channels.
Firstly
, having activities on the ground have positive impacts which are getting new friends, physically strong and even boost the metabolism rate by doing a lot of movement.
For example
, playing football needs at least 22 people and above for two teams
besides
easily can get friends while playing. Not only getting new buddies but
also
improving communication skills as well as teamwork.
Secondly
, the involvement of entertainment show on seasonal festival definitely can gain the unforgotten memory and the experience at least once in a life. For
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instant, being a team player on a comedy show as a supporting actress, the bottom-line was an acting skill and collaborating with others.
In contrast
, along the day, sitting at the table and playing
games
or surfing the internet may harm the adult' eyes and can even tend to be the less development of height.
For example
, the child who was playing
games
almost every day,
then
his eyes need a pair of glasses before the late 20s. To be concluded, even though there has an optimistic and pessimistic view of the usages of electronic devices, the recommendation has been more weightage on physical movement and outdoor activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependent
  • computers
  • electronic entertainment
  • outside
  • sports
  • traditional pastimes
  • excessive
  • negative impacts
  • physical health
  • mental health
  • promote
  • overall well-being
  • play outdoors
  • read books
  • socialize
  • develop
  • balance
  • holistic development
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