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Some people say now there is less communication between family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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communications play an essential role in social life. certain individuals believe that now
people
 have less interaction between the blood relations as compared to past, due to advancement of technology;
however
, my opinion world has become a global village ,yet many in it
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 green apart.
to begin
 with, the most prominent reason, why now
people
 communicate very less with kinship,
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is due to their busy schedule and some
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 in their lifestyle . Because
,
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people
 only
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 on their competition and
trying
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 to
coping
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 with
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inflation.
thus
, they are doing hard work for their monotonous lifestyle. To vindicate, according to BBC, Japan is a
well developed
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 country, as
in
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this
 nation have more competition and their
people
 only focus on their mindsets.
hence
 ,Japanese
people
 have less communication with their family members as well as with their friends.
secondly
, lack of generation gap
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also
 plays
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 role in less communication with others. nowadays an era of technology so,elders citizens
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 not enough knowledge of it.
Thus
, young children cannot cope
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 relationship
between
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 old age individuals. shifting towards the
second
 school of thought,
people
 are glued
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 social media. they have busy in socialize apps like Instagram ,WhatsApp and Snapchat.
hence
, they are over-embellished only on internet friends but they do not have
relation
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between
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 their family. in conclusion,
although
 everyone
have
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 a busy schedule , the generation gap and technology is
also
 indulged in the lack of communication activity , yet they should give time to their family member.
hence
, they will make their strong bonding with each other.
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