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Many people think that too much attention and resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people feel that
conservation
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the conservation
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 of
livestocks
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livestock
 and feathered creatures is occupying too much concentration and resources. I totally disagree with
this
 idea due to two reasons. The main reason why I disagree with
this
 idea is that illegal trading of wildlife activities is still popular in many countries.
Although
 the fauna plays an important role in biological diversity and keeps the ecological system balanced, people are putting these wild creatures
at
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in
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 great danger by illegal
huntings
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hunting
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. One good illustration of
this
 is
large
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a large
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 number of elephants or rhinos are being trafficked for ivory
with
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at
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 high prices in black markets. As a consequence, wild animals and birds are on the verge of extinction. Authorities,
however
, do not impose stricter laws and fines on
this
 prohibitive action. The
next
 reason is the lack of government's budget for protecting natural organisms from dying out.
Instead
 of allocating more budget for establishing organizations or campaigns and building garden parks to preserve these wild fauna, the government spends a lot of money on economic growth.
That is
 to say, they make full use of empty lands or even deforests with the aim of constructing too many high buildings, which makes a contribution to
the
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habitat loss.For that reason, the scarcity of the fauna’s shelters reaches an alarming rate. In conclusion, I am against the above notion because of the prevalence of smuggling rare animals for personal uses and the government’s lack of proper management. Given
this
situation
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 it seems that each of us should make more efforts to keep the natural fauna safe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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