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The given line graph provides information about amounts of imported merchandise to the United Kingdom through various transport systems, namely
road
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, water, rail and
pipeline
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, in a 28-year period. Overall, it appears that all modes of Transport had experienced an upward trajectory. While the
road
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 was the
first
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 preferred way of transporting goods, the
pipeline
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 had remained the most conservative one over the set period. Regarding
road
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 and
pipeline
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, both of these ways of transferring had seen an upward rise during the years. Starting out at 70
million
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 tonnes of transported goods, the
road
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 was the most selected way in 1974. Following
this
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, it had some fluctuations before 1994, at which point it surged sharply to approximately 98
million
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 and rose slightly to the end of the period.
Pipeline
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 joined the same upward trend, standing at a mare 2
million
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 products, it started as the lowest among all and had grown gently until 1994 when it levelled off at 22
million
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. Looking specifically at water and rail, both figures started at the same number of 40
million
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 goods. Whereas the former had risen gradually to 63
million
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, the latter oscillated widely, ending at its original amount.

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