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some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Give reasons to your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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A number of
people
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 believe it is necessary to create
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strict regulations to manage the amount of
noise
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resulted
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 from mankind due to the distraction made to society.
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 explanation of the upsides and downsides in favour of my own. It is generally accepted
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 some
people
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 to urge the government for creating
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laws regarding living things that could
makes
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noice
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noise
 and cause
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disturbance.
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 could lead to
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awareness among citizens as
people
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 would think twice to act something that
annoy
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 their
neighborhoods
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.
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, it is critical to set the rules of the barking dogs which
they
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could create annoying
sound
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sounds
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 in the middle of the night and
people
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 might be awakened.
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,
this
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 created idea could minimize or avoid
noise
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 produced
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 the residents and
creating
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 a harmonization among citizens.
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,
stricting
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restricting
striking
 the laws in terms of
noise
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 is somewhat exaggerated since there are still a lot of problems that need to be solved. If these regulations are taken seriously and officially
being tighten
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being tightened
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, the factors that
considered
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 as
a
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noise
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 needed to be clear,
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, there will be plausible that many
people
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 would report the sound that they feel bothering them. In fact, the sound itself might not highly
interrupting
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.
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, it is just wasting the time of officers from the government because they need to do back and forth to deal with
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 problem.
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 could to disunity among residents. To sum up, creating and tightening up the rules in regard to
noise
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 is fundamental in social life,
,
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however
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, the rules need to be cleared before being announced to
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society. I concur that it is beneficial to
large
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 number of
people
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 if the laws are
stricted
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strict
restricted
 as long as they are easy to be understood.
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