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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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These maps illustrate the alterations of a public park since it is
first
 opened in 1920 until today. It is clear from the maps that the entrance gates are still in the same place; one is in the north while the other one is in the south. According to what is shown, the
rose
 back yard located in the northwest remained in the same place, while in the opposite side-northeast- the
rose
 garden is replaced by a fabulous café. In the Middle East, there was a stage for musicians which was demolished and Amphitheatre are built for concerts. There was a fountain at the centre of the park in 1920 which today was demolished and a
rose
 back yard is built
instead
 of it
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 surrounded by seats in all the directions. In 1920, there was a pond for water plants situated in the northeast that was today demolished and
then
 the children’s play area is built in the same place. As the glasshouse that was located in the southeast was demolished in order to establish water features perfectly.
In addition
 to all the previous amazing changes in the park, the seats around it are moved to the centre around the
rose
 garden, and an entrance underground for car parking is established.
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  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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