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Essay writing. More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, car and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In today's life, purchasing variety
have
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 increased more and more because society has to show their status to society and for their status
also
. I agree with positive statements and provide several reasons why the customer wants to buy these clothes.
To begin
 with, the public is spending their money more and more on character because they really need the best
quality
 and products.
First
 of all, these products are produced by some popular
brands
such
 as Gucci, Louis Benetton, Zara, etc. Branded products are
also
 shown to have better
quality
 and
thus
 people prefer them over that product.
Moreover
, these
brands
 have come with the pocket of the ordinary person. With the growing economy, the people status has drastically increased, which
also
 make them
to
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go for
brands
. The increasing
brands
 in today's life have many advantages. The main advantage is that companies now emphasise
on
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quality
 and customer service. Businesses know that to survive in today's competitive world, they need to have a good
quality
 reputation, and
hence
 people are offered better service.
For example
, if a person buys a new branded cell phone, but unfortunately it
stop
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 working for some reason, he gets a full replacement, provided it's with warranty periods. Companies are
also
 benefited as it becomes easier to produce a new product into the market. they need to spend less on marketing if they already have a good brand image. Another positive effect is that these
brands
 can give anyone franchise to the person
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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