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More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol these days. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

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These days, most
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youth from
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diverse backgrounds are getting addicted to a plethora of intoxications
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 as alcoholic beverages and marijuana. The kids are unaware of
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 are getting into and
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, it would only bring devastating consequences to them.
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, when the children are staying in hostels they are not under the supervision of their
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.
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, there are a plethora of chances for them to get inspired
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others with similar habits.
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, they tend to get habituated to
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, a cousin of mine had an identical scenario. He was staying in a flat with his friends with
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 addictions.
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, he too learned them and
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 he started performing
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 in the exams. So, others do have an impact on one's own life.
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, one practical solution for it is teaching them to lead an ethical lifestyle
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 from their childhood.
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, they must be made aware of the results of
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 behaviour but it should still come from one's own mind and only
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 they would prohibit
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 routines. To illustrate it, Ajay a friend
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,
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 was taught to be good,
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, and ethical
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 only by his elders. Today, he is known for his
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others and
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 he does not have any ill habituations as well.
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 crucial role. In summary, it is possible to be introduced to
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 things from a wide range of sources but a person should look after himself and
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discourage
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, elders should have a keen observation
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 their
offsprings
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 yield a better life for the young.
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