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Countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree?

The rich
countries
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 often donate to poorer
countries
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,
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 they fail to effectively tackle
poverty
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.
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, wealthier
countries
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 should give additional support
instead
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 of funding. I am in full agreement with the idea that practical help ,
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education
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 and jobs, can lead to long-term improvements. One of the reasons why
poverty
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 cannot be called the key issue of the 21st century is
increase
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the increase
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 in underdeveloped
countries
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. These days, wealthier
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 encourage poorer
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 with money
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 great, but it does not lead to long-term solutions.
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, it contributes to corruption in poorer
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.
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, there has been a noticeable increase in corruption in Bangladesh.
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, the government pays less attention to the development of the country.
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, it is necessary to provide essential resources
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, employment opportunities and teaching individuals new modern technology skills.
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, practical assistance
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education
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 and job training helps people in poorer
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 become independent rather than dependent on aid. When individuals promote useful skills, they are more likely to secure stable employment and contribute to the economy.
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, a poorer country to invests in schools can play a crucial role in developing key industries.
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, providing business skills training can grow the national income.
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, the state does not face financial aid challenges.
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,
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poverty
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 is regarded as the most crucial problem of our century, I am convinced that the problems of poorer
countries
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 should prioritized
education
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 in schools to reduce
poverty
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.

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task response
Be clear from the start. State your view, then add why you think this. Add one main plan of action for the future.
coherence
Make ideas fit in order. Use a simple plan: intro, body with one idea each, then a short end. Use words like First, Next, Also, Finally.
task response
Add more detail to each main point. Explain how education and jobs cut poverty. Tie each idea to the prompt.
coherence
Use clear link words to tie ideas. Start new paragraphs for new ideas and end with a short conclusion that restates your view.
grammar
Check grammar and form. Fix small mistakes like 'a poorer country to invests' and 'should prioritized' so your ideas are clear.
lexical
Use simple words and keep to common phrases. Do not use hard or long words.
task
Your view is clear and you take a stand in favor of practical help.
content
You mention education and work as key ideas, which fits the topic well.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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