The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018.

The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018.
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The pie charts depict information about changes in four different modes [cars,
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, bicycles, and walking] in the city of Cambridge for ten years period, starting from 2008.
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, it is clear from the pie charts that the population of bicycles and walking increased significantly, whilst cars and
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declined gradually. Looking at the first group, just over a quarter of the popularity of
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and walking rose steadily to more than half in ten year period from 2008. Starting
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bicycles, which made up 17
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percent
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in 2008 and increased to 30
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percent
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. Moving on, walking comprised 11
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of the total popularity
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jumped by 14
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in 2018. Turning to the
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group, more than seven in ten
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people who used cars and
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busses
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dropped considerably to 45
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from 2008 to 2018. Compared with the first period, the amount of popularity of cars fell twice from 42
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. Meanwhile, the user of
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busses
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buses
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decreased from 30
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percent
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in 2008 to 25
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in 2018.
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