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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem.

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Urbanization,
deforestation
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 and hunting wild
animals
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 illegally are the reasons for
animals
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 becoming endangered and even the disappearance of certain
species
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. It is very crucial to protect
animals
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 and the biosphere between all living things. As I’m concerned, there are some solutions to
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 problem. As technology and living standard are getting higher and higher,
people
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 cut down trees and replace them with modern buildings. Logging illegally is one of the major factors of
deforestation
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. In my opinion,
people
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 should participate in a campaign in which they explain the importance of trees for
animals
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 to local
people
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. There are some campaigns but clearly, they are not sufficient. After causing
deforestation
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 and destroying the biosphere for years, I think we should
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 repair it by doing reforestation. So, there should be a worldwide festival where
people
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 plant at least a tree. If the measure is completed, it will result in the reduction of the extinction of
animals
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. The
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 major factor is poaching in which
people
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 hunt wild
animals
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 for fun.
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 terrible activity is popular these days. There are
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 illegal sellers of certain
species
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 for better income. To cope with these problems, the government should handle them with strict laws and sentence them to jail when necessary.
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 would be enabled to protect
animals
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. To conclude, because of
deforestation
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, urbanization and illegal hunting, many animal
species
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 are facing to become endangered. To solve
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, many campaigns for reforestation and strict laws announced by governments can be done to protect certain
species
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.
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