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People say that it is a waste of time for high school students to learn literature at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #waste #time #school #students #literature
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There is a controversial idea heating the debate over the fact whether
literature
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 is redundant for
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 in high school. While
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 thinking is valid to some extent, I would contend that learning
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 is of necessity in the curriculum. It is irrefutable that
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-based subjects are gaining more and more preference because of the ever-increasing need for
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 development in today’s society.
Science
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 and
Technology
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 Development is one of the measurements of national prosperity. The more top-notch
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 is, the more booming the country will be . In fact, each year, a huge amount of budget has been allocated to novel research in
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 by every nation either developing or
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 one. The world
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 competition
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 more and more intense in the
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 several years, which results in many advanced discoveries and inventions
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 as artificial intelligent robots.
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, scientific subjects are taken more consideration in education, which leads to the neglect
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-based ones. While the redeeming features of learning
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 are widely acknowledged, that of
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 should not be ignored, particularly in provoking
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’ patriotism.
Learning
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 history events in written documents,
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 will get a firm grasp of the civilization of the countries as well as a strong sense of historical identity.
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, the twelfth graders in Vietnam are taught about the Independence Declaration written by President Ho Chi Minh, which marked an important milestone in the Vietnamese war of national liberation.
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students
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 may take great pride in their country and treasure the present freedom as it is an expense of blood, sweat and tears of the previous generations, which urges them to contribute more for the national abundance. To conclude, It is undeniable that
literature
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 can act as a precursor in arousing
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 patriotic sentiment. In conclusion,
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 has not been taken into consideration because of the domination of
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 and
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 subjects,
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students
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 in building their concrete sense of patriotism.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fostering
  • cultural heritage
  • critical thinking
  • empathy
  • analytical thinking
  • emotional intelligence
  • articulate
  • relevant
  • contextualize
  • globalized
  • comprehension
  • reasoning abilities
  • perspectives
  • moral dilemmas
  • culturally literate
  • cross-cultural communication
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