Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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work
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in the same organization for their entire
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working life while others believe that moving to different
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is better.
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essay will illustrate the two different views of the working styles. On one hand, working for the same organization helps
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grow their area of
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expertise
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, an employee who works in the same organisation will be an expert in the team and able to handle the incident when the
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has a critical situation.
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, the benefit to workers who stay in the same organisation for
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time is they will get more benefit
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to new joiners. In some
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, they have a benefit to give more pension payment for employees who stay for more than 5 years to reduce attrition rate and retain
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On the other hand
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, working in different
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builds up the skill of facing
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situation
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. When
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move to
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company
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companies
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, most of them move to
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similar job position to grow
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skill in depth.
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, the challenges that
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can take from changing the
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are not only
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culture and environment of
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company
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but new
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, every challenge can make
people
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more innovative due to different situations to manage.
As a result
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, it brings up the strong soft skills for
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who
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in different locations and styles. To summarize, both working
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can build up the skill
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but working in different organizations is more
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than working in the same
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. Personally, I think working in different
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could help you to grow in person.
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, I still believe
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have to settle down in
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company
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in one day until their retirement if they find their best place to
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