IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3.5

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures #answers
,well there is
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
big
arguments
Change the noun form
argument
show examples
 behind traffic and pollution problems mainly in the metro city while some
people
 say that increasing the price of petrol will solve
this
 problem. but in my
view
Add a comma
,view
show examples
 I
am agree
Change the verb form
agree
show examples
 with
this
 statement in
this
 essay I will discuss my opinion and give prevalent examples ,
firstly
 because of
vehicles
 increase in
this
 world day by day and corruption contains more and
people
 suffers health problems too so we cannot stop the manufacturing
vehicles
 because its one of the more effective things to
people
 ,
furthermore
 increase the payment of fuel will more effective
for instance
 most of the middle-class society will take back step from buying motorcycle,car, etc...
therefore
 they will use only public transports and
also
 the government has to take some restrictions,
for example
, increasing the electric
vehicles
 more
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
will be more beneficial and
also
 make public transports free and
then
 provide a restriction on
people
 buying more
vehicles
Add the comma(s)
, therefore,
show examples
therefore
 the traffic problem and pollution problem will slightly down ,to sum up,
people
 have to think about their future lives because of us they will not get good oxygen ,
on the other hand
, increasing the level of
vehicles
 is more problems with traffic and pollution
Add the comma(s)
, therefore,
show examples
therefore
people
 have to use more electric
vehicles
 and more public transport.
Submitted by samaladk5151 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: