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In some cities, there is less control over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings. People can build in whatever style they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Generally, the design of
homes
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 and
buildings
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 have been changing over the past many years all over the world, and in some
cities
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 there are fewer restrictions on construction.
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons of
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 trend.
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 with, there are some disadvantages of
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 constructions according to the people's style.
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, we see many large
buildings
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 cover the small
homes
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 with their shadow and individuals do not get enough sunshine for themself and for their plants, and they are not able to see the sunset, which is
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 very pleasing view. Which may lead to a lack of vitamin D in the body.
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, if
buildings
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 and houses are being built according to the people's style,
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 there we can expect less safety. Because large
buildings
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 can fall down with the natural disasters
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 as storms,
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, and destroy small
homes
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 and
buildings
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, and probably it can cause to the loss of lives and wealth.
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, there are many advantages of
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 trend.
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 and foremost, because home is a thing where a person spends his/her life's most of the time with his family, so individuals can make their dream houses. Another one, big
buildings
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 save space because of their height.
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, if we build 100 offices separately, it will cover too much space. But in one building we can have the same numbering of offices and can save space, which can be used for another purpose like gardening or farming. To conclude , I believe, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Because, if we follow the safety guides, still we can have our dream
homes
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 or
buildings
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 and save
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others lives.

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