Topic: Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extend do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays we can find many

children

with many health problems because of their lifestyle. In

fact

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some countries like Mexico have the worst indicators on

children

with diabetes illness and extra weight. On one hand, we can see that the

children

prefer watching television or playing video games

than

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go

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out and playing outside or doing some sports.

On the other hand

in some crowed cities is

difficutl

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difficult

to find green areas or playgrounds available for childrens' recreation. Another reason is easier for

children

to find and to buy unhealthy food

instead

of

healthy

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one. To solve the problem is needed that the

parents

to

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be

consciuos

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conscious

about their

children

and

also

be more involucrated with the

children

's

interest

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interests

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. Most of the

parents

work both of them and let the nursery to another person.

However

, the

freetime

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free time

that they have they can spend with their

children

, doing recreative activities and trying to eat healthy in

family

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.

Furthermore

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the schools are not responsible

of

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for

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lifestyle

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the lifestyle

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of

children

, but they can make some politics to help

parents

,

for

example

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to avoid

have

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vending machines with junk food. But the reality is that

this

kind of

machines

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machine

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represents

incomes

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income

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to the schools most of the time and,

this

type of politics are difficult to establish.

As

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a

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conclusion, a healthy lifestyle begins at home, so the

parents

have to start with themselves, and

then

with their

children

. Because

,

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the

children

learn everything from their

parents

. If the

parents

are used to

eat

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eating

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junk food,

watched

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watching

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television all

the

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day, don't do

excersice

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exercise

, their

children

will be similar.

In

contrast

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if the

parents

are healthy eaters, very active people,

consenquently

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consequently

the

children

will be.