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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, as
the
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technology develops, many companies in the world are inventing unmanned
vehicles
. A lot of people believe that
this
 kind of
transportation
 will be used
widespread
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 in the future. In my point of view, there are both advantages and disadvantages. Unmanned
vehicles
 have drawbacks to humans.
Firstly
, these
vehicles
 have some potential risks to human’s safety. Because of being controlled by the controlling
center
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, if there are some errors, people on the
vehicles
 will be injured or even die.
Therefore
, the reputation of the companies which own the system will go down.
Secondly
,
this
transportation
 will make traditional drivers lose their jobs.
Then
, the unemployment rate of many countries will rise significantly ,so a lot of people will become homeless or
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 with low subsidies.
Beside
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 the disadvantages of unmanned
vehicles
, there are many positive effects of
this
transportation
. If the system is fixed daily and fewer errors exist,
the
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human’s safety will increase more than in the past. According to many accidents that are related to public
transportation
, most of the cases are caused because of drunk drivers. If the driver is a robot,
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 safety will be ensured more.
Moreover
, using unmanned
vehicles
 will reduce the chance of being robbed by some fake taxis. In conclusion, using unmanned
vehicles
 have both negative and positive impacts, but
i
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 think that its benefits
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 outweigh
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the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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