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Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environmental responsibility while others believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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individuals argue that visitors should be responsible for social and environmental outcomes, while others are convinced that they should not be in charge of any consequences at all. In my opinion, I completely agree with the
first
 one and I will support it for 2 following reasons.
To begin
 with, acceptance of responsibility for the environment can help nations to save money. In some recent statistics, tourism disposes of about 50 tons of garbage a year which results in the billion-dollar consumption of cleaning?. There is no doubt that if the government enforces some law that can obligate visitors to take duty for environmental problems
such
 as monetary punishment or higher taxes, the amount of trash will be reduced and help the government to save money.
In addition
, the disposal taxes
also
 make an enormous contribution to the national funds which can be used to enhance the living standards of people.
Furthermore
, taking duty for community issues can prevent social badness. It goes without saying that every nation has its own rules and these rules are different from others, so travellers can easily commit crimes which can lead to some adverse impacts on society.
For example
, in Canada, using cannabis is legal, so if Canadian tourists use cannabis in Viet Nam, they can tempt the youth to use it which? can lead to unforeseen consequences in the future. Undoubtedly, imposing a set of regulations of social duty on travellers plays an important role in preventing potential social evils. As held by the opponent, some people have a firm belief that travel costs, nowadays, include taxes for these problems, so visitors don’t need to be in charge of them. No one can deny
this
 idea,
however
, governments are unable to control these issues without sightseers' responsibility.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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