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Many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good thing?

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Marriage
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 is a big event involving a
lot
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 of
people
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.Since the past, we see parents saving their hard-earned wages for their children's
marriages
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.Invitations are given to everyone and they are expected to attend the
marriage
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,bless the couple and have lunch.But spending too much
money
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 on
weddings
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 is not necessary.In
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 essay , we will discuss the disadvantages of expending a
lot
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 of
money
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 on
weddings
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. We see parents saving their capital for
weddings
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 rather than saving for the studies of their kids.
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 is especially in the case of girls.
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,in India girl education is neglected while giving utmost preference to
marriage
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.
Although
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 globalisation has spread across the countries,in India we see families giving more importance to a girl's
marriage
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.They feel it's futile for a girl to study.But
this
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 attitude can be changed by conducting campaigns to spread awareness among
people
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 about education.
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,a
lot
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 of food is wasted in
marriages
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.We see a
lot
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 of
people
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 going to bed with empty stomachs due to poverty.
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 in India, we witness almost every wedding has a
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lot
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 food wastage and anyone don't care about it.We
also
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 come across cases where
people
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 borrow
money
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 for
weddings
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.In the course of time,some will be able to pay the amount while others are unable.The ones who are unable to pay spend sleepless nights. In my opinion,
marriage
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 should be planned as simple as possible inviting only close relatives and close friends.A
marriage
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 must be carefully planned. To conclude,
people
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 must not spend too much on their
marriages
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instead
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 they must spend
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money
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 on useful things like education.We can't tell
people
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 to stop
marriages
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 but we can encourage them to plan a simple wedding.If they wish they can have a grand reception.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extravagant
  • Lavish
  • Societal norms
  • Cultural heritage
  • Economic benefits
  • Luxurious
  • Ceremonies
  • Designer outfits
  • Unforgettable experience
  • Obligation
  • Social status
  • Memorable
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Grand
  • Expectations
  • Local economy
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