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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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It is widely known that immense
vehicles
 on the
roads
, particularly in huge and prominent
cities
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cities
, causing various problems afterwards
such
 as air pollution, disturbing noise to households, and accidents on the
roads
 have become a serious issue these days. There are abundant factors why these phenomena happen.
Therefore
, in
this
 essay, I will explain the causes as well as the possible solutions for
this
 issue.
To begin
 with, as traffics congestions mostly occur downtown, one of the reasons for
this
 occurrence is lacking
entertainment
facilities
 especially in the countryside and suburbs
such
 as department stores, theatres, and amusement parks. It is undeniable that some countries only have these
entertainment
facilities
 in eminent
cities
. That means whenever people in other provinces desire to go to
places
 like that they have to go to that famous towns
also
 causing heavy traffic there later.
In addition
, some
cities
 have poor public transportations making citizens in that
cities
 select to drive private automobiles or motorbikes because of the convenience rather than using inferior public transports.
As a result
, there will be numerous
vehicles
 on the
roads
.
Nevertheless
,
this
 phenomenon can be resolved with the assist of the national government. The
first
 sensible solution is the government must improve public transportations in order to subside the amount of the
vehicles
 on the
roads
. If these public transports are easily available, extensive to various
places
, and low price, most populations will choose to use them more than cars or motorbikes.
Furthermore
, the government should generate new media centres in different
places
 except for downtowns.
Thus
, citizens do not have to go downtown;
instead
, they are able to find
entertainment
facilities
 in their own
cities
. In conclusion, the massive amount of
vehicles
 on the
roads
 has many causes
such
 as poor transportations as well as lacking
facilities
.
However
,
this
 occurrence can be corrigible by the aiding of the national administration to improve public transports and construct more new
entertainment
facilities
 in other
places
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
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  • sustainable transport
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