As children become adults, their social behavior changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behavior and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

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and character in many dimensions
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with other people. There are some essential social comparisons between youngsters and adults which influenced by a variety of factors. In my
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advanced change for them to form their
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them to enter the community.
This
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a serious period of children’s
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, one of the significant differences is
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certain borders to connect with some people in adults which cannot be seen in children’s character. as a matter of fact, maturing help people to analyze better people’s intent that
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them to protect themselves proportionally.
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, adolescents prefer to spend their time with their friends more than family so in most cases being with friends caused many consequences
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that 50
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of their
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become more similar to ones who connect to them more than others that it would be positive or negative. It seems that all these points are not in the right way, because it depends on background {family and friends} and the experiences that children had in their
lives
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also
their paternity.
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, becoming mature can
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many positive impacts
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will be more developed. In conclusion, children’s
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do not follow any instructions or
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, they do what they want regardless of being ashamed they all are free and pure, but
this
is a part of our
lives
but the process of growing up is a part of life and I wish that all children have time to deal with these changes slowly not only because of their fragile characters but
also
, they lost something that they cannot experience one more time in their
lives
.
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