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Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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Education
 is an essential part of everyone life, but some children are deprived of
this
.
Although
 it is sometimes thought
education
 should be free to
students
 from all economic backgrounds. In my opinion, I considered that University
education
 ought to be free, as it will greatly benefit both individuals and society, but it has some drawbacks
also
. A good reason to abolish school
fees
 is that it gives people equal rights, whether they are rich or poor.
In addition
, children from a poor family background are prevented from entering school or University because they are not able to pay these
fees
.
This
 excluded a large proportion of society and is discriminatory which can be avoided by getting rid of tuition
fees
. Another point to consider is that having no
fees
 at University means that
students
 will not have to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs.
For instance
,
students
 have to work full-time or part-time while studying to pay their
fees
.
Moreover
, Free
education
 should,
therefore
, produce apply better results as
students
 will be able to concentrate on their studies.
On the other hand
, having no
fees
 at schools can lead to detrimental effects on society, as universities have no income from fess so, they would be dependent on the government.
Furthermore
, Government has already many expenses, and it can not take
this
 burden.
Hence
, minimum
fees
 should be necessary for
education
. In conclusion, free
education
 is essential at all levels of
education
, as it would be beneficial to the country. But, some disadvantages
also
, and they should not be neglected
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