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Band 5

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, people have divergent opinions whether economic
progress
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 is a
prepominant
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predominant
 propulsive
forse
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force
forces
 in the
country
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's development. While some insist that the most crucial government's objective should become
progress
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 in
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economy
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the economy
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, others argue that
progress
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 in the fields, which are not akin to
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economy
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the economy
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, is equally crucial. I am a strong advocate of the latter statement as
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success in the modern world requires improvements in a wide range of areas. According to supporters of divergent-based
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, the government have to sustain the development in basic fields as politics,
economy
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, agriculture and manufacturing roughly on the same level. If one of those
ares
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areas
 is characterised
with
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rapid
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a rapid
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 decrease, the
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 will face
crisis
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a crisis
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, despite the flourishing state of
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economy
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the economy
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.
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, even though some African countries show impressive economical growth, their overall situation is still positioned on a low level due to
lack
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a lack
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 of
investmant
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investment
 in
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the agricultural
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 sector and inferior educational system.
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, putting economical
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 as an overwhelming goal of the
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 can bring many positive improvements as rising of the
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 in the
worls
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world
world's
worlds
-trade ranking and the inflow of
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foreign investments to the
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. What is more, great economical situation
enhance
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 the start-up companies to base their offices on that area,
thus
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 it will
impower
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empower
power
 the
country
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 with recently developed technologies.
Great
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 example is India that recently accepted the course of improvements in
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economy
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the economy
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 and shows that
this
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 approach can exist.
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, I assume that
this
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 approach is flawed and only offers a
temprory
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temporary
 improvement to the overall state of the
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. To sum up, even though the state of economical
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 being the major goal is a point of controversy, I believe that
general
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develpment
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development
 of the
country
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 is dependable on all types of
progress
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.
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