At the present time, the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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number of the youngsters than elder people in many nations.

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young workforce. Another advantage is that

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, these kinds of countries will be taken more time to develop.

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youngsters in various nations. Another disadvantage is that

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age is expanded by a healthy lifestyle and fitness of the adults. To conclude,

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process is conducive to building a healthy society.

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