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The government should spend more money on medical research to protect citizens’ health rather than on protecting the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #research #citizens’ #health #environment
These days, most scientific
research
 activities are funded and undertaken by private companies
instead
 of the government.
Although
 there are several benefits from
this
 trend, its drawbacks are more significant. On the one hand, private funding helps scientific
research
 to be conducted without interruptions caused by significant government budget cuts. Reduced state funding in the recent decade has led scientists to be insufficiently paid and
research
 activities to be constantly delayed.
Furthermore
, private funders usually are risk-takers and,
therefore
, more willing to provide bigger financial assistance.
This
 means that
research
 institutes are able to afford better facilities and equipment that allow them to be more efficient and
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produce more accurate outcomes.
Also
, scientists would be more well-paid for their work and
hence
 more motivated to undertake their researches.
On the other hand
, it is difficult to ensure the reliability of
research
 outcomes when private entities are the funders.
Research
 institutes have to agree upon the terms and conditions dictated by the companies that pay them and act
accordingly
. It means that the final
research
 results may be manipulated towards the direction
that is
favorable
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 for the funders.
Consequently
, scientific
research
 activities could be turned into profit-driven programs that benefit only a handful of organizations
instead
 of society as a whole. In conclusion, the downsides of the increasing reliance on private,
instead
 of
government
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, funding to conduct scientific researches are greater than the advantages due to the concern over the integrity of
such
 researches.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral obligation
  • advanced treatments
  • economic benefits
  • workforce
  • healthcare costs
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • comprehensive benefits
  • investment
  • global sustainability
  • long-term health security
  • disease proliferation
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