Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy? (Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.)

Nowadays,
people
think that the best way to be happy in life is to have
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amount of money.
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However
, personally, I think that cash
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obviously
can make humans joyful. On the one hand, having a lot of money might make
people
happy because they will feel
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.
For instance
, Bill Gates
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of the richest
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in the universe.
Then
, he can purchase almost all
things
, no matter how much they cost. He
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worry about
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day, and even in some complicated situation connected with
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health, he can allow
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valuable treatment for all
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family. Following that, of
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billionaire feels confident and convenient.
Thus
, to some extent capital can really make someone happier.
On the other hand
,
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have
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a lot of other
things
in life which can make
people
happy. In fact, some
peoples
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can not be replaced and no amount will much as their presence.
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, parents and close friends.
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these peoples make
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joyful.
Then
, none other than mum
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will motivate in difficult
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or dad who will strive to help
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son
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with choice.
Hence
, throughout the world
people
can find other different means, that would replace material happiness. To conclude, I believe that in future the majority of
people
will consider
also
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of happiness. Definitely, cash can help
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some extent but can not wholly replace
pleasure
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the pleasure
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of common
things
such
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present from
close
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friend or even congratulations from parents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wealth
  • Affluence
  • Prosperity
  • Financial security
  • Opportunities
  • Options
  • Experiences
  • Enjoyment
  • Helping others
  • Generosity
  • Philanthropy
  • Achieving goals
  • Realizing dreams
  • Peace of mind
  • Reduced stress
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