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Nowadays many business meetings and training are happening online and not in real offices.do you think the advantages of this approach outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent times, there is an emerging trend where office
meetings
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 and training
courses
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 are taking place
in
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online rather than offline
mode
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.
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 there are
few
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 drawbacks, I think that the benefit of
this
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 scenario is more than that. On the one hand, due to technology development, most of the
meetings
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 are held in online
mode
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. People from various countries are connected through the internet applications
such
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 as zoom, teams.
Furthermore
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, Working individuals are able to access the team
meetings
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 from their home which reduces the need
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 commute during traffic and other difficult situations.
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, During
pandemic
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a pandemic
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, most of the offices requested their employee to work from home which enables them to link through online
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.
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, each individual would like to develop
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 career even they are working.
This
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 tends them to participate in
a technology
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technology courses
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courses
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which
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held in
online
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an online
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 method. So that, they can attend the classes based on their
convenient
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.
Also
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,
Many
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courses
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 are taught by foreign tutors which provokes them to join in online.
For example
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,
friend
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a friend
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 of mine completed a new technology course
from
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online, despite
of
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her busy schedule.
Moreover
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, the availability of offline
courses
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 is limited, whereas there are
plethora
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 of online
courses
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 in the market. To conclude,
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 people feel to meet their colleagues and
work
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working
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 in
office
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the office
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 location.
However
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,
this
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 online
mode
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 plays
vital
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a vital
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 role in the modern era. Based on the aforementioned reasons, I believe that
meetings
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 and
trainings
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training
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 which held in online
mode
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brings
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 benefits to the employees more than the drawback.

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