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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. To what extent do you agree?

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It has become apparent in recent years that computers might be a substitution for tutors at schools.
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, I am against
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 point of view and am inclined to believe that none of the cutting-edge technologies
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 any chance to replace teachers in their
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. In
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 essay, I will scrutinize my position on the issue at hand. There is no doubt that teachers play a pivotal
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 in the educational process. Tutors are not just the persons, who restate the information based on the theoretical material, but they comprehensively contribute to the children’s upbringing.
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, being a teacher means
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 a mentor,
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 model and even an adult friend, who can support children. In terms of
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 effect, I am inclined to believe that never a laptop will manage
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 a complex educational part
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 society. It should
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 be stated that a lack of an individual attitude towards pupils performed by computers, might be an obstacle to a clear understanding of the learning material.
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, children might not be able to understand the information with the
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 attempt using just a computer as the only source of information.
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, only by real communication with the child, can the tutor find out what exact area needs to be explained again.
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, if teachers were substituted by computers, many pupils would not have a high-quality education because of students’ knowledge shortage. In conclusion, I would like to emphasize that in
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 in the studying process.
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 computer technologies develop rapidly, teachers’
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 is irreplaceable and machines will never be able to substitute an individual approach along the learning path.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital learning
  • Personalized guidance
  • Blended learning
  • Remote education
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Human interaction
  • Cultural dimension
  • Mentorship
  • Critical thinking
  • Educational technology
  • Learning outcomes
  • Role model
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