You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear David, Hello Amal, I hope you are keeping well. I am writing to you to give some advice because I have recently received a letter from you.
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, I would not recommend to attend to the college in your area. We couldn'
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find
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international colleges.
moreover
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, local student use their local language
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it feels like alone and not possible to find friends.
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, fees are more expensive. In Korea, the cost of living is very high students can'
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survive and haven'
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any jobs.
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you are studying difficult to save many
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. I suggest finding a suitable job for you.
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think it would be a better choice for your future plans. I know you haven'
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any work experience but
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, a good idea to find a small job
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as a waitress and retail kind of job.
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you can build up your work experience step by step. if you are difficult to find it please inform me I help you soon as I can. I'm waiting for your reply and see you soon. Best of luck, Smith.
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph contains a single, clear idea. Combining too many ideas in one paragraph can confuse the reader.
complete response
Avoid overly general statements. Provide more detailed reasons and examples for your suggestions to strengthen your arguments.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend.
greeting and closing
You have included a proper greeting and closing, which makes the letter feel complete.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical nature
  • real-world experience
  • practical experience
  • professional network
  • financial independence
  • dynamic
  • on-the-job learning
  • creative industries
  • customer service
  • sectors
  • suitable
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