Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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environmental pollution, largely caused by
people
using vehicles for transportation, some individuals argue that raising
fuel
prices
is an effective way to address
this
issue.
Although
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disagree with
this
statement, I believe that the environment would be healed. On the one hand,
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issues
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that will affected
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increase
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fuel
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is the decline in economic growth.
Due to
the higher
fuel
prices
, problems will arise not only for consumers but
also
for entrepreneurs.
For example
, some
people
may not be able to afford petrol, which could force
fuel
companies to shut down.
Moreover
, it could lead to many problems
such
as
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and
reduction
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of
fuel
business, which would impact
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income and
also
people
who
use
private vehicles.
On the other hand
,
this
action can tackle the environmental issue.
As a result
of growing
fuel
prices
,
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will turn to
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public transportation for travel, which lead to the decline of toxic
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in
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caused by the emission of automobiles.
Moreover
,
this
shift can encourage the development and
use
of cleaner and sustainable energy.
For instance
,
people
in Thailand tend to
use
electric cars
due to
high
fuel
costs, which helps reduce air pollution in the country and contributes positively to the global environment.
To sum up
everything that has been started so far, it is considered that raising
fuel
prices
may negatively impact the economy but it can lead to improved environmental conditions.
This
actively demonstrates that
fuel
prices
shouldn’t be increased, but that does not mean the idea should be ignored.
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task response
Your essay effectively addresses both sides of the argument, acknowledging potential economic detriments and environmental benefits. However, ensure to maintain a consistent stance throughout for clarity. Your conclusion could reflect this more decisively.
coherence and cohesion
Work on refining your sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity. For example, phrases like 'owning to an increasing of' could be corrected to 'due to an increase in'. Improving sentence flow will increase the comprehensibility of your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion that frames your discussion, guiding the reader effectively through your arguments.
task response
You provide relevant examples, such as the situation in Thailand, which substantiate your points and lend credibility to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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