"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.

It is generally claimed that the preventive methods in advance could save a solid amount of money. Personally, I partially agree with the general opinion
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all possible illnesses and need to calculate prevention and cure itself.
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might be not as cheap as prevention.
For instance
, cutting down on sugar,
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, taking recommended
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dietary
supplements with healthy food helps over the time close the doors for
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diabetes
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life could be equal to the treatment`s money. The difference only preventive care demands money one bite at a time,
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informed on own upcoming
health
issues or perhaps know but while preventing comes up the
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yourself to eat balanced. healthy diet, working out following healthy lifestyle can suffer from sudden risk.
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of situations
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not so often. A common opinion is that a community who mainly
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food
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and the general state of being in a good condition live
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and healthier life. From my point of view, discovering
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. Because it needs an inner
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emotional and psychological well-being.
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is
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process that takes away mental and physical energy.
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a desire to save
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there would be a need an
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prevention.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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