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In order to alive traffic problems, government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportiong. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Nowadays, the amount of private transport,
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, have been suffering a sharp increase.
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, the automobilist infra-structure didn't follow the same rate. One solution that came up for some countries is the application of an extra tariff for the ones who choose to have a private vehicle.
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 few years, private transports had turned much more affordable. Recent research shows that the price of a middle-class car decreased an average of 45% in the prior 10 years. The positive impact of
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 path goes from the growth of a more convenient, comfortable and secure mobility lifestyle, to the escalated amount of jobs that the factory of private
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 involves. The appliance of an additional tax over private holders could cause retrocession in all these benefits, once fewer people would be able to afford
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, the increase in the unemployment rate.
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, lesser people using individual
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, would bright the necessity of better infrastructure for public transportation, reaching a point that the use of shared transports intent to turn more suitable and inexpensive than a private one.
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, Berlin is a city that invested so much in buses and railways, that the number of
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 lesser than in Malta. In conclusion, based on all the reasons mentioned above, I would state that there is a huge advantage in tax private car holders to invest in public auto infra-structure.
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