In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about it.

There are specific areas of the US where juveniles have a specific time to return home every evening, unless in the company of an adult. My personal opinion is in accordance with
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I will expose arguments to support my personal point of view about the above matter. Recent researches around the world demonstrate a sharp increment in teenagers' involvement in violent acts in the
last
15 years, and that most of the political
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during the night. The 3 main causes of it, the scientist found to be psychological and mental disturbances, familiar problems, and,
last
but not least legal and
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drug abuse. Understanding that most of
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harmfull
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not during the day, under the sun and busy daily lives, but yes, when the lack of light and urban movement, serves as
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soil to the vulnerable young adults stays out of the family eyes, and overuse drugs. All
this
situation contributes to
this
higher score of juvenile involvement with violent acts.
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hand, there are the adolescents who,
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the end, turn into victims of
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violent acts. For
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, girls between the age
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9 to 17 years old have
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prominent risk to suffer from abusive or/and violent attach than former women. Is important to highlight as well
that is
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responsibility
of the adults to look after the wellbeing and safety of a teenager, and
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limits of time to arrive at home is one important way to preserve the integrity of the ones who could become victims,
moreover
, it
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young people to fall into
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of go to the wrong and
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path.  The world is a dangerous place for teenagers, people who didn't complete
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personal and educational formation. It is
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the parents, and
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the absence of them, the
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, through legal sources, preserve the integrity of the vulnerable ones, creating ways to decrease the rate of young criminals, and
also
to protect the possible young
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. In conclusion, I
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believe that areas
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implement
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for teenagers do so to increase the quality of their life and their growth process
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  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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