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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opinion

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Human behaviour has always had negative effects on the world’s ecosystem. Global warming and air pollution have become real problems and the increased frequency of natural catastrophes
such
 as floods, earthquakes and storms are a clear sign of that.
However
, many believe that it is impossible to find a solution while others affirm that we are still on time as far as we start acting now. I personally don’t know if it’s too late or not but at least we have to try. Clearly, the main obstacle is that our economic system is based on the overproduction of goods, above our necessary needs.
Moreover
, companies have to increase their production every year to be considered healthy. In order to reduce the impact of people’s lifestyle on the
environment
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 we should start by reducing industrial activities.
Nevertheless
, that would affect the wealth of many countries, hardly tolerated and accepted by governments. For
this
 reason, many sustain that it is impossible to change humans’ impact on nature because that would mean redefining the economic structure.
On the other hand
, others believe that it is possible to make a change but that we don’t have any more time to waste. Only a few years ago it was very rare to hear on the news about global warming while now every natural event has been related to that.
However
, governments are still procrastinating. Indeed, they know that to make a radical change are necessary unpopular decisions. In spite of that, new generations are more and more informed and they are asking out loud to save their future. I believe that our way of living is unsustainable and that radical changes are urgently needed. I’m
also
 aware that it would not be easy but that we have no other options.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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