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Recent research suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison commit crimes after they are released. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem?

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It has been shown in recent findings that
offenders
 do offences again after they were released from behind the bars.
Such
 cases have increased drastically nowadays. I shall present the possible reasons for the re-commitment of any
crime
 in
this
 essay. There could be many plausible reasons for
criminals
 to commit any
crime
 again including the sense of revenge if someone has complained about them and regret for the wasted time. To overcome
this
 problem, rehabilitation could be an effective approach.
Firstly
, nowadays it can be seen that
criminals
 do not have any fear to go behind bars and they deliberately commit any
crime
 again for their satisfaction and revenge. Many
offenders
 believe that they have wasted their time in jail which
result
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 them getting frustrated.
Such
 feelings of frustration could lead them to act against any rule and regulations.
Therefore
, a number of
criminals
 do not hesitate to misbehave again for self-satisfaction.
In addition
, revenge could be another reason for
offenders
 who re-commit offences and ultimately, any unlawful activities landed them again in jail.
Secondly
, the probable solutions by which these unlawful activities could be prevented and specifically, which could change the perspective of the criminal.
For example
,
instead
 of sending them behind bars, any government should offer rehabilitation programs
such
 as spiritual lectures and initiate
such
 activities in jail that help
criminals
 to overcome the stress of society and sense of the
crime
.
Moreover
, the people should be kind and welcoming to the
criminals
 once they come back to their society.
This
 might cause some change in the perspective of
offenders
.
Hence
, it is believed that
this
 problem can be solved. In conclusion, most people who break any law and go beyond rules and regulations could be a threat to any society.
However
,
such
 problems can be tackled in a sensible manner by providing rehabilitation and therapy programs to
criminals
. I am hopeful, these kinds of programs surely strengthen the belief of
offenders
 in the law of any nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recidivism
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegration
  • Marginalization
  • Vocational training
  • Psychological counseling
  • Sentencing laws
  • Community-based programs
  • Anti-discrimination laws
  • Employment bias
  • Probation system
  • Social stigma
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