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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
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Social
media
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 has spread out its popularity day by day. It has become the basic need and quality of human beings to be social.
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, its impacts on human life are argued, its existence is being considered to ban or continue developing. Social
media
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 has quite a lot of benefits, a useful tool undoubtedly. It takes a significant role in helping
people
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 to keep in touch with each other.
People
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 thousand miles far away can still see their family and friends in just one face-call.
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, you can easily build up a relationship with
people
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 around the world based on the power of social
media
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. Another advantage which is needed to be noticed is the opportunities for business. There are a number of customized applications being made on social platforms, whose main purpose is to promote the product or brand. Shopee is one of the biggest examples of marketing on social
media
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.
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 its benefits, we must acknowledge its disadvantages. The
first
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 and most important, the privacy of users. Theoretically, users'
information
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 must be kept a secret as long as they do not want to publish it.
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,
on the contrary
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,
information
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 was leaked and many accounts have been hacked.
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 can lowkey lead to the effect on user morale and properties due to the importance of the
information
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. Disinformation is
also
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 a disadvantage that can cause incalculable danger, trigger the anxiety of community networks, especially during
this
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 Covid era. Imagine fake news about Covid death's rate statistics spread out with the
information
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 of so many
people
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 had infected and died. How anxious would residents be? Taking everything into consideration, social
media
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 stands somewhere between good and bad. But based on its advantages, it should be kept. Hopefully, some solutions like
information
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 filtering or high-rate security will be developed and cover the inconveniences of social
media
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.
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