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the water usage in two various cities (San Diego County and California) compared to Worldwide.

The given pie charts illustrate the information about the
water
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usage
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 in two various cities (
San
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Diego
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 County and
California
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) compared to Worldwide. The general overview here is that all two cities used the most
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 for residential, and the least amount of
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usage
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 was used for agriculture in
San
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Diego
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 and
California
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.
In contrast
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, in the other parts of the world agriculture are the most
water
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usage
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. According to the charts, it can be seen that
San
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Diego
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 and
California
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 used about 60% and 39% respectively of their
water
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 for residential compared to only 8% Worldwide.
On the contrary
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, roughly 69% of
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 was used by the rest of the world, which was dramatically more than
San
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Diego
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 and
California
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 who used only 17
%
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and 28% consecutively.
Moreover
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,
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 indicated a high figure of
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usage
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 for industry, accounting for 33%.
on the other hand
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, Worldwide and
San
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Diego
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 shared a similar figure of a mere 23% of
this
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 figure over the observed period.

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