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It is sometimes said that the country side offers a high quality of life, especially for families. What are the arguments for and against families choosing to live and work in the country side, for example as farmers? What is your own view about this?

Nowadays,
quality
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life
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 is given priority by each individual before moving to any new residential place. Few individuals are having thought that living in a peaceful place like
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 countryside is
better
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 option rather than living in a crowded
city
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.
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, there are both negative and positive points for living in a
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countryside
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country
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countryside
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side
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. Both these points will be discussed in
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 essay, but I personally prefer living in a village area. There are always two sides
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 coins,
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similarly
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 there are
few
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a few
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 pros and cons
living
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 a countryside
life
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. While living in the rural area, an individual along with his or her family can get fresh
air
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 to
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, unadulterated
food
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 to eat and clean water to drink. These things will definitely enhance
one
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's
quality
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 of
life
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 as due to these advantageous factors
one
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 will be less prone to any kind of illness. Other the other hand, living in these outskirt areas, a family tends to feel deprived
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 medical facilities in case of emergency, malls to visit, restaurants to spend leisure time and better educational academies.
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, my old uncle along with his wife is living a happy
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 in a peaceful farmhouse outside the main
city
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 where he grows fresh vegetables, but
last
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 year,they had to send their daughter to
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city
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 for higher education. If I have the opportunity to choose, I would have preferred
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countryside
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country
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countryside
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side
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 living rather than staying in
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city
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the city
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 as I am a
nature loving
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 person and these places are best for doing meditation as well. Benefits like fresh
food
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 and clean
air
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 are definitely beneficial for
one
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's health
over crowded
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 and polluted
city
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life
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.
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,these are the key factors when we evaluate the
quality
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 of an individual's
life
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.
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, paying a visit to my father-in-law's farmhouse is always a pleasant experience for me because there is no pollution in the
air
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 and
one
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 feels rejuvenated over there.
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,
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the country
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countryside
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country
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countryside
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side
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 is undoubtedly
preferable
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the preferable
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 place to live for me. To conclude,
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 are mixed opinions about families living in
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the country
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country
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countryside
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side
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 on the factors like health, education and
food
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 which are discussed above, but I opt for living outside
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city
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the city
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 due
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quality
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 of
life
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 we get through fresh
food
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 and
air
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 which are basic requirements for survival.

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