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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
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The statement “It is time to ban social
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” has been something talked about more and more recently.
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 social
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 has proved itself to be detrimental in almost every
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 believe it is still a medium that contains many benefits in every
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. On the one hand,
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 agree that social
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 has created excessive freedom. More recently
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 from all around the world have been using social
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 as a
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 to express their point of view in an extreme
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. Social
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 has allowed
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 to be more receptive to ideas they might not have heard or validated, which has led to conflicting and misleading opinions, causing unnecessary arguments.
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 that agree with them want in, and
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 that don't want out, or haven't begun yet, end up in the middle.
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 is where the problem lies.
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, I believe there is a balance between the negative effects and the benefits that social
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 brings. Social
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 began as a
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 for friends and family to keep in contact with one another, but it has quickly transformed into a tool that brings
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 together. Not only that
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 contains a wealth of information for every subject. it is
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 a platform for sharing experiences, conveying good things. Social networks are formed and shaped based on human
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 and needs. We should not blame it when social
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 serving many of our interests. In conclusion, while social
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 has a lot of toxicity, I do not believe it's
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 all other benefits. Pooh
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