With the increase in low-cost airlines, overseas travel has never been easier or more affordable. However, some people believe that such travel should be limited or stopped altogether to preserve the planet. How far do you agree with this viewpoint? Should governments put measures in place to control the amount of air travel?

Although
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positive change in the number of cheaper airlines,
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abroad has never been affordable.
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,part of the population
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that
such
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should be controlled so as to keep the
earth
safe.In
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will discuss in disagreement with the general view and my
reccommedation
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recommendation
to governments will be illustrated at the end of
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.
Firstly
,there is no
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negative relationship between human movement by air and changes in
earth
's wellness.
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made by
aircrafts
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is basically not on the planet's surface but in
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space.
For example
,an aeroplane moving from
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to Asia will only have contact with the
earth
's floor at the beginning of
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journey
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and at the end.
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means that any other locomotion will be happening
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the atmosphere where there are no structures
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which
can be damaged by the craft.
Therefore
,travel by air poses almost zero risk to our planet and there is no gain in banning its use.
Secondly
,transportation of people is
benefitial
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beneficial
to the whole world as there will be
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an exchange
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of technology,culture and human resource which will change the continents for better.For,instance,when professionals move to other countries away from their
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in search of greener pastures,they carry their skills and
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knowledge
with them to trade them to
foreingners
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foreigners
hence
creating a positive impact
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that community they go to
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earth
a better place.
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far and wide. In conclusion, overseas travelling should be highly appreciated by all governments because it helps the countries
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each other making the
earth
balance its ecosystem
hence
improving people's lives,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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