n some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of unhealthy

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should promote more healthy ways to eat at an affordable price.

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if they advertise a lot more green

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and make it easy to buy for everyone. When if they just increase the tax on it, for poorer

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would be really hard to afford it. Another reason is homeless in many

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. In conclusion, the number of

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is increasing, our countries should find better options

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they should look after the

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to make more profit from them.

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n some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money?

An increasing number of larger shopping areas, malls and department stores are leading to the decline of smaller corner shops. what are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping in larger shopping centers rather than smaller, more traditional shops?

In many countries import food from other contry of the world.what are the advantages and disadvantages of this kasur.

Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?