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n some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays in some
states
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pepole
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people
 that are having health
problem
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problems
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 are increasing because of the
consium
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consortium
consumer
 of junk
food
.
However
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 it is necessary that
governaments
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governments
 put a higher tax on fast
food
 to help to improve
this
 kind of situation. I
completly
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completely
 disagree with
this
 and I am going to write the reasons why it
should't
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shouldn't
should
 be done. In big cities the
consume
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 of unhealthy
food
 is getting higher,
therefore
instead
 of increasing the price
governaments
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governments
 should promote more healthy ways to eat at an affordable price.
Also
 if
this
 can be done it would help many
peapole
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people
 to stay fit and have
less
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 medical problems. for
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instance
instace
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 an
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enormous
 city like New York would make
such
 a big
different
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difference
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 if they advertise a lot more green
food
 and make it easy to buy for everyone. When if they just increase the tax on it, for poorer
pepole
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people
 would be really hard to afford it. Another reason is homeless in many
cuntry
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country
 relate
on
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 junk
food
 because is less
expencive
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expensive
.
Although
 is not the best
opption
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option
 for their health is still the cheapest to survive.
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Furthermore
 if those countries make it harder for them to buy
those
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peapole
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people
 won't have anything
elas
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else
 to rely
to
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upon
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 and they my
starv
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start
 and
strat
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start
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commiting
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committing
 crimes. Even if
this
 is not the best nutrition it can save
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lives
lifes
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lives
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. In conclusion, the number of
peapole
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people
 having
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health
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heath
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health
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issuse
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issues
issue
 with street
food
 is increasing, our countries should find better options
instead
 to make it more
expencive
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expensive
. In my
opinion
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 they should look after the
pepole
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people
 more
instead
 of
try
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trying
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 to make more profit from them.
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