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Band 3.5

The world’s governments and organizations are facing a lot of issues. Which do you think is the most pressing problem for the inhabitants on our planet? And give solutions.

Today is the era of technology
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 there are so many hazards that
causing
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problems for our planet . There are widespread worries about pollution , pandemics , natural disasters ,global warming
etc
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. In
this
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essay
I
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will discuss the most prominent problem and
by
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 using a prudent
approach
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 will provide a logical conclusion.
According to
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my
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, Global warming is a hot issue today
that is
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 affecting the
earth
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 in various ways.
Firstly
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,
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Due
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 to global warming temperature on
earth
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 is constantly changing
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.
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In
in addition
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 to
this
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, in many places in the
the
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world
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world,
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 it's causing floods and drought.
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, it is affecting the ozone layer
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that
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 is playing an important role
to protect
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 the
earth
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 from dangerous UV rays , which will lead to many skin diseases.
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, global warming is the cause of the greenhouse effect
,
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furthermore
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 it affects
lots of
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all living things on the
earth
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. To control
this
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 government should take serious steps ,
such
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 as planting more and more trees , promoting public transport
to
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 control pollution .
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, they should give hefty fines to those who contribute to increasing global warming by any means . People
also
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 use recycled products to help the authorities . In a nutshell,
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According
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 to my
,
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opinion
we
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 can ignore other issues
but
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 global warming is the most preponderant one that should be resolved at an alarming pace .

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language
Check grammar and spelling so ideas come out clear. Use full stop at the end of each sentence and start with a capital letter.
structure
Make a short plan. Say your view at the start and then keep the plan in the body.
content
Give a real point for each idea and a small example to show it.
cohesion
Link your ideas with small words like also, but, so, first, next.
structure
End with a short rest and restate your view clearly.
content
The writer takes a clear view that global warming is the big problem.
structure
The essay has a start, a middle and an end.
content
The main idea is kept through the text.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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