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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

#people #individuals #companies
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In
this
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 pandemic of Covid-19, there is a significant increase to shop online
instead
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 of door to door. The big reason
of
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 click and collect is lockdowns where all cities of the world are closed for customers to shop inside. Everyone is using the
contect
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contact
content
less
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 pickups and
drop offs
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 to avoid the virus. There are several advantages and disadvantages of purchasing products online for both customers and
sellers
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 in the following ,paragraphs. To commence with, buying stuff online is become
a
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 important activity
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these days. The major benefit of
this
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 activity is
time saving
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. To illustrate it,
people
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 can buy anything from anywhere in the world just in
few
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a few
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 clicks.
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 to it, they do not have to physically visit the place to buy the item.
People
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 can order
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after hours. It is easy to access. On the other side, for the
companies
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,companies
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 they do not need to have
expensive
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an expensive
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 office or
show room
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showroom
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 to sell their products. To explain it, business owners can keep their material in storage and they have put their stuff online to sell. By doing
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, they save money
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 extra staff and for the extra space.
However
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,
this
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 tool is beneficial for both consumers and
sellers
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. On the flip side, like every rose has its thrones. Online shopping
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also
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 have concerns.
Firstly
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, Sometimes
people
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 brought something and they got something else
or
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of
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 poor quality.
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,
people
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 can not check the quality of
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a product
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product
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products
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 online and they ended up with
loss
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a loss
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.
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, in
recent
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a recent
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 study of America shows that
people
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 buying
Iphone
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iPhone
 online from Amazon are getting toys
instead
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.
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,
people
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 lose their
valuabale
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valuable
 money.
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, on
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sellers
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the sellers
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 side, some
people
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buying
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buy
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a product
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product
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products
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 and
receiving
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receive
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 the correct
product
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 and still requesting
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the
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 refund as they
lying
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for
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about
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 not receiving the
product
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.
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,
Sellers
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 lose their business. To conclude, online shopping is a very useful tool to use. Before ordering
people
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 should check the websites are
they
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apply
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geniune
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genuine
 or not and for the companies they should keep
record
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a record
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 of
receving
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receiving
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product
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products
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 by the buyer and
also
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 keep proof of packing products before sending.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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