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You recently went on holiday and your friend lent you a travel guidebook. Write a letter to friend. In your letter . tell your friend about the holiday . explain how the guidebook was helpful . say when and how you will return the guidebook.

Dear Tiffany, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. You know very well
last
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 week I went on
vocation
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vacation
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in
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to
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 your favourite place which is California. I am excited to tell my holiday trip,
this
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 trip gave a plethora of happiness to
me
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and
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my family
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apply
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also
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, we
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were
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stayed
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for
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in
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for
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 one week and
almost
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many iconic places were visited especially the historic museum
is
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which was
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 the icing on the trip. I used your guidebook in many locations,
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have
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 helped more to me because the
forst
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first
 time I went
in
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to
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 California and I didn't know about the visiting locations,
how
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or how
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 to reach the venues
in
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at
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cheap
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a cheap
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 cost.
Everthing
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Everything
 was included in your guidebook.
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 helped a lot. Certainly, I will give
your
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you your
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 book
in
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apply
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this
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 weekend
saturday
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Saturday
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 at your house, yes I will come to your home
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 I will give you. I would be grateful if you would arrange any
plan
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plans
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 for us, we will
take
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have
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 some fun at
weekend
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the weekend
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. I look forward to receiving your response as soon as possible. Thank you, Best regards, Paige.

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task response
Address all three points in the prompt: holiday description, guidebook's help, and returning guidebook.
coherence and cohesion
Use appropriate paragraphing and improve the structure of greeting and closing.
lexical resource
Expand the range of vocabulary, use more precise words, and correct word usage and spelling errors.
grammatical range
Use a wider range of grammatical structures, correct verb tense usage, and sentence structure errors.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gratitude
  • Breathtaking
  • Insights
  • Invaluable
  • Local cuisine
  • Navigating
  • Off-the-beaten-path
  • Anecdotes
  • Well-preserved
  • Reconnect
  • Safeguarded
  • Courier
  • Itinerary
  • Landmarks
  • Cultural gems
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