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Writing: People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today, there is a tendency for people to give birth and start families at a later stage in their lives. On balance, it seems there are more drawbacks. Despite these disadvantages, there are certain benefits that can be encapsulated under the umbrella of stability, both: financial and familial. As a couple progresses in
life
 they should have greater financial resources to draw upon to support their
children
 and reduce the negative impact on poverty.
In addition
 to the financial stability, there’s
also
 stability in the family which should increase as the couple matures.
As a result
,
children
 born at a later stage are less vulnerable to the negative consequences of divorce and family break up which are less common in older pairings.
Although
 the aforementioned positive aspects appear to have great strength, there are
also
 significant negative factors to consider. Foremost, as people age, they suffer from a greater amount of genetic degradation which can increase the chances of having a child with a genetic defect
such
 as Down's syndrome. Another factor that can have a detrimental effect on a child’s quality of
life
 is the fact that older people tend to have less energy which means they are less able to cope with and raise their relatively more energetic young
children
. In the same way, there is
also
 a generation gap in terms of relatability. As the age gap between the child and the parents increases their ability to relate to each other and share the same ideas about
life
 could be placed under severe pressure.
This
 may have negative consequences on the child’s upbringing and development.
For instance
, there could be numerous intra-family conflicts between youngsters and their elderly parents. In sum, given the greater number of negative elements in comparison to the smaller number of positive aspects of giving birth at an older stage in
life
, it is reasonable to conclude that it is more beneficial to conceive and raise
children
 at a relatively earlier age.
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