Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing different types of genetically modified (GM) crops. However, not enough is known about these crops on our health and the environment. Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibited. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The rapid growth of the population results in the never-ending demand for
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products. Biotechnological Co-operations all over the globe are enhancing various kinds of genetically modified crops
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others believe that it will be harmful to our body and
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to nature. In
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essay, I think altering the plants using technology is entirely dangerous to the human race. First of all, genetically modified crops will be costlier than regular ones.
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, the use of pesticides will be in
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enormous
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and it will decrease the productivity of the soil.
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, soil erosion will take place
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farmland will be of no use after certain years.
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, wild animals
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often eat the remaining parts of crops, in turn, will be in a serious problem because it will affect their health.
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, no cultivation can take place in the near future
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if
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process is continued.
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cause a detrimental effect on human health.
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, they might prove toxic for animals,
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as bees and butterflies.
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, currently, bees are the most well-known source of pollination.
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, they won't be able to provide us with pure honey
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the
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items will lack all essential proteins
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vitamins
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. To summarise, I believe that GM
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has negative effects on the functioning of
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and it is not an environmentally friendly solution.
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mismanagement is going on because the higher authorities of each country want an increasing demand for
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supplies.

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structure
Make a plan. Start with a short intro that states your view. Then give two or three clear points with simple examples. End with a brief conclusion.
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Give full and precise support for each point. Use real facts or close examples. Avoid broad claims without proof.
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Use linking words to show flow between ideas, like 'also', 'however', 'for example', 'in addition'.
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Check word choice and grammar. Use correct subject-verb form and plural nouns.
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Be careful with facts about biology; if you say bees are harmed, explain clearly or avoid errors.
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Clear stance on GM crops.
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Gives some examples to support points.
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Attempts paragraph structure with 'First of all', 'Secondly', 'To summarise'.

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