with increased in global demand in oil and gas, undiscover areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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world
requirement
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fossil fuels,
undetected
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field
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of the globe should be opened to reach
further
energy
resources. I totally agree
to
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opinion because the industries and transport of the
world
solely
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dependable
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on fossil fuel or
so called
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petroleum
oil. The main reason why I believe to detect these
energy
treasures is
,
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because
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fossil fuels are
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to generate
power
. As
the
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most of the
world
industries is running by
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to produce some consumable products. As well as
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,
power
is essential for domestic, Hospitals and
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use. To illustrate, the plastic industry
need
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power
for running the machinery which
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part in producing plastic. Another reason why I believe to explore these
energy
treasures is, that the transport industry
need
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fuel to transfer the goods from one country to another country, or from one city to another city.
This
is because among countries the transportation modes are water, air, or roads and for all the modes heavy
machineries
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are required and those heavy
machineries
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need fuel to run. As well as
this
,
petroleum
products
are need
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for
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vehicle
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, using for public transport. In
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I completely agree
to
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that the high global requirement
in
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fossil fuels,
unexplore
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unexplored
zone of the globe should be opened up to approach more
energy
and
petroleum
assets.
This
is because to generate more electricity and
fulfill
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the need of
transportation
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industry. Given
this
situation, it seems that the organization of
petroleum
exporting countries need to hire more exploring companies and provide every necessary facility to them to reach out these resources and
fulfill
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the
world
energy
requirement.
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