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some people clain that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. they say that the only way to increase recycling is for giovernments to make it a legal requirenment

#people #clain #waste #home #giovernments #requirenment
People
 who claim that domestic waste's recycling is not common in
population
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,
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 that it should be required legal by governments. Some countries are demanded
spesific
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specific
 rules for domestic waste, while most of them don't have any certain approaches. In fact, whilst most
Europian
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 counties have to bury their organic garbage
to
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 their garden to dispose
and
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 classify , in Turkey we don't have to do it and, because of the
different
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 between these two governmental approaches our country is dirtier than them and we are not able to use these
wastes
 as
recyclable
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the recyclable
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 source.
Legal
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 obligation is needed
make
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community
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to
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get used to recycling
of
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the house
wastes
. When individuals separate the
wastes
 as which include plastics, glass and food
wastes
instead
 of
hold
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 them mixed, will save energy which is used for separation.
Besides
,
people
 who have
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a house
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house
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houses
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 with
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a garden
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garden
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 can feed their soil by burying them. When acting like that, parents will be good examples for their children about how should save the environment,
also
. Another benefit of the governmental law’s about recycling house’s stuff is that to keep
the
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nature clean. In fact,
keep
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 it clean is
rather
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 simple and cheap way than
what
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trying to dirtiness. According to a specific article in social psychology
people
 who walk in a clean street
which
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 doesn’t have any garbage
felt
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 that they
not
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 allowed to throw away things;
however
, individuals who walk in dirty streets take throwing their garbage to the streets normal. To obligate recycling of house
wastes
 is essential for society and the world since
people
 still need to learn and understand how and why recycling is vital for us. During
this
 learning period using governmental obligation will effect positively speed of the learning process and save
environment
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the environment
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