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The growth of online shopping will one day lead all shops in towns and cities closing.

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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Online shopping is a trend which has got its popularity in recent years and it will definitely one day lead to all
shops
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 in towns, nearby cities and possibly will extend to
country sides
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countrysides
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also
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 to some extent.
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 is a very interesting topic of discussion which asks that if online shopping which is done on
E-commerce
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platforms
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 will lead all
shops
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 in town and answer is already mentioned above which is yes.
This
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below
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 reasoning There are various
E-commerce
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platforms
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have
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that have
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 come forward for online shopping like amazon,
flipkart
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, eBay to facilitate online shopping, which has made users very easy to order the
products
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 in very
less
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 time and with very optimal effort. These
E-commerce
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platforms
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 have
lot
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 of
customer friendly
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customer-friendly
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 policy which has made online shopping very reliable and safe. For most of the
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products
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,products
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 these
platforms
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 offer
return
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 policy and very supportive
after sales
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after-sales
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 service. Many local
shops
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 do not have
flexibility
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the flexibility
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 of
this
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 level for
this
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 kind of
customer friendly
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 service,
specially
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 when it comes to returning
of
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apply
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the product.
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E-commerce
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The E-commerce
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 platform has done
lot
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a lot
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 of
tie ups
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 with various logistics partners and many places they have developed their own logistic chain which
are
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 very reliable and
thus
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 they are able to ship
products
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 in almost all part of cities or even beyond that in a reasonable
time line
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timeline
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.
E-commerce
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platform
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platforms
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also
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have
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tie ups
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 with various banking and financial institutions which not only provide a very good discount but
also
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 many times offer flexible EMI payment options and many times these EMI options are
interest free
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interest-free
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.
This
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 is something most of the
shops
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 even are not able to offer. Earlier online shopping was limited to
products
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 only but today it has extended its horizon to grocery and various medical essentials.
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, today we can
also
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 order various
kind
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kinds
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 of services
also
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 online like massage, hair grooming and personal care treatment. Online shopping is
modern
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the modern
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 era of shopping which is becoming omnipresence and it will definitely lead to all
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 in towns but
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nevertheless
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 there will be some of the people, who will still love to
classic
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the classic
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 way of shopping which is going
in to
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shops
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 and feel the product before actually buying but that numbers will be less in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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